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Friday, October 23, 2020

The Shopping Trip

The Shopping Trip

tall palm trees stretched to the next floor blue purplish light tangled the trees. the sound of chitter chatter filled my ears. blue and white firework looking lights hanged from the ceiling. i could see from the first floor that a McDonald's was on the 5th floor! clean shiny white walls and smooth concrete floors with black x's on it. relaxing cream coloured cushioning seats and Bright green potted plants.bright colourful lights with store logos on them. i spotted a women with a light brown coat with black buttons. walking into the daire's shop. busy people bumped into each other. i heared the sound of the cash register ch-ching. i realized there's one problem at this mall WHERE'S THE BATHROOM'S. i saw furniture store's, food store's, clothing store's, and even makeup stores. but not BATHROOM'S i could smell salty chips and cheesy burgers from the McDonald's store. i could see faint people in the distant. cold air brushed my face as i entered the McDonald's store. i could see big burgers stacked with lettuce, tomato, cheese, and beef paddies. marble tables with tiny bits of food some even with drinks spilled on them. workers chatted with customers as they take there orders. ch-ching a cash register went. there were a lot of lights on the ceiling.

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora Olivia!
    Personaly I HATE shopping, but that character must. I love Mcdonalds though, like every other child...
    You should add more capitals, and I couldnt tell if this was a description.

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  2. Hi Olivia!
    I love shopping and I can see that the person in this story loves shopping too. I really like the describing that you used!
    Do you like to shop? if so what for? I like to shop for scarfs and I have so much scarfs, Though I don't use them I just collect them. Good story Olivia!
    From Willow-Rae

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